Well written, excitement building was great. Ending was too final for me hoping for something more hopeful ☺️. Probably because I always wanted to follow the road less traveled but didn't and will always wonder what it could have been.
Oh Shaina, you sucked the wind right out of hope with "Her last thoughts were of her mother...". No remaining hope that I suspect everyone entertains way down deep until that point of no return, and then a little bit longer...until the final paragraph ends and we scroll down to find the authors credit! I mean, how could anyone human not give an innocent (but foolish) young person with their whole life in front of them, one more break, one more chance. Isn't it enough to scare the life out of them? Or maybe that's exactly what happened?
Well written, excitement building was great. Ending was too final for me hoping for something more hopeful ☺️. Probably because I always wanted to follow the road less traveled but didn't and will always wonder what it could have been.
Oh Shaina, you sucked the wind right out of hope with "Her last thoughts were of her mother...". No remaining hope that I suspect everyone entertains way down deep until that point of no return, and then a little bit longer...until the final paragraph ends and we scroll down to find the authors credit! I mean, how could anyone human not give an innocent (but foolish) young person with their whole life in front of them, one more break, one more chance. Isn't it enough to scare the life out of them? Or maybe that's exactly what happened?
Successfully creepy!