Phenomenal, Shaina. As Dan says, this is so well structured. I feel like we're drifting in and out of memory caused by the heat. It's brutal and affecting, gritty and real, but there's a veneer of something unsettling too, caused by the radio/keys in the ignition.
My apologies for being slow on keeping up with these, I've been saving each entry as it arrives.
Feels like a painful descent into a guilt fueled delusion that his father is laughing at him for his mistake. I feel his despairation but not yet acceptance of the futility of his situation if no one comes along to rescue him from his error!
Phenomenal, Shaina. As Dan says, this is so well structured. I feel like we're drifting in and out of memory caused by the heat. It's brutal and affecting, gritty and real, but there's a veneer of something unsettling too, caused by the radio/keys in the ignition.
My apologies for being slow on keeping up with these, I've been saving each entry as it arrives.
No apologies needed! I am LOVING your story and am curious about auto fiction in general. Looking forward to more
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Nothing like a haunted radio to make you think.
Car off, check.
Radio off, check.
Still the ghosts use it to communicate.
Spooky, but good.
Still can't believe he forgot or didn't want to pack a tire.
Feels like a painful descent into a guilt fueled delusion that his father is laughing at him for his mistake. I feel his despairation but not yet acceptance of the futility of his situation if no one comes along to rescue him from his error!
This is really great Shaina. Fantastically structured, brilliantly realised and wonderfully written. Well done 👍🏼