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Very compelling. Your prose is clear and vibrant. Interested to see where this story goes! Great job.

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This has some nice poetic flourishes. The description when she’s under the tree and the leaves are trembling like tambourines and she’s looking at the pink of her closed eyelids is beautifully executed. 👏

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Daniel said it first, but that waking dream sequence transition is great and realistic in the way dreams morph rapidly into waking.

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